Newspaper
writing 101
These are tips for beginners on writing newspaper articles. They were written
for participants in the Detroit Free Press high school apprenticeships.
Writing the story
A story is much like a conversation. It begins with the most interesting piece
of information or a summary of the highlights and works its way down to the
least interesting facts. There are words or phrases that take you from one
topic of conversation to another. Before you know it, you're finished.
Inverted pyramid
You should be very familiar with the inverted pyramid style of writing. You'll
likely use it every day. For example, when you call a friend to tell him or
her about a big date, you begin by telling the most interesting and important
things first. The least important information is saved for the end of the
conversation, and depending on how much time you have to talk, that information
may not get into the conversation.
That concept also applies to news stories. The lead is the first paragraph
of a news story. Usually, the lead is one sentence long and summarizes the
facts of the news story in order of most newsworthy to least news-worthy.
The reader should know at first glance what the story is about and what its
emphasis is.
Here is an example:
Bargainers from General Motors and UAW Local 160 will resume talks in Warren
this morning seeking to end a day-old strike over the transfer of jobs from
unionized employees to less costly contract workers.
Who, What, Where, When, Why and How ... The five Ws and an H
Depending on the elements of news value, the summary news lead emphasizes
and includes some or all of the five Ws and H.
Who names the subject(s) of the story. The who, a noun, can refer to a person,
a group, a building, an institution, a concept -- anything about which a story
can be written.
The who in the lead
above are the bargainers from General Motors and the UAW.
The what is the action
taking place. It is a verb that tells what the who is doing. Reporters should
always use active voice and action verbs for the what because they make the
wording direct and lively.
What are the bargainers doing?
The lead says they will resume talks.
When tells the time the action
is happening. It is an adverb or an adverb phrase.
When will the bargainers resume
talks? This morning.
Where is the place the action
is happening. Again, it is an adverb or adverb or adverb phrase. In our story,
the where is Warren.
Why, another adverb, explains
the action in the lead. The bargainers are meeting to discuss the transfer
of jobs.
How usually describes the
manner in which action occurs.
The lead
The lead sets the structure for the rest of the story. If the lead is good,
the rest of the story comes together easily. Many reporters spend half their
writing time on the lead alone. One guiding principle behind story organization
is: The structure of the story can help the reader understand what you are
writing about. The structure should lead the reader from idea to idea simply
and clearly. The object is to give readers information, and wow them with
convoluted style.
News lead
In one of their bloodiest raids into Lebanon in years, Israeli warplanes killed dozens of Muslim guerrillas with rockets and machine-gun fire Thursday as they pounded a training camp of the pro-Aranian party of God.
Quote lead
``I have the worst job in the Army.'' This is an example of a good quote lead because the reader asks, ``What could that possibly be?''
Description lead
Penciled sketches of an air strike, complete with renderings of F14s and Patriot missiles. And on the ground, tiny people run for cover. That's how 8-year-old Jimmy Zayas pictures war in the Middle East...
Like a beauty pageant entrant, Donald Hofeditz struts his vital statistics. He curls his thumb in his waistband to show he's a size 36, down from 40. He pats his stomach where 50 pounds used to rest. And he rubs his chest about his now healthy cholesterol level of 177.
Hofeditz even relishes showing his ``before'' pictures. The pot-bellied 70-year-old in the early 1980s was unable to cut his backyard grass because of the cumbersome weight.
Bad lead
A reminder to those who enjoy good new records. The library has 22 new records which it is willing to loan out! The students are invited to come and look them over!
In the first place, the opening sentence isn't even a sentence. There are times when sentence fragments are acceptable, if you use them effectively, but that first sentence isn't one of them. Is it news that the library is willing to ``loan out'' materials? That's what libraries are for. The word ``out'' is unnecessary. And ``loan'' is an adjective or noun, not a verb. Make it ``lend.'' A better way to express the thoughts in this lead would be: Twenty-two new records have been placed in the school's lending library, the head librarian announced.
Transitions
With one-sentence paragraphs consisting of only one idea -- block paragraphs
-- it would be easy for a story to appear as a series of statements without
any smooth flow from one idea to the next. Block paragraphing makes the use
of effective transitions important. Transitions are words or phrases that
link two ideas, making the movement from one to the other clear and easy.
Obvious transitional phrases are: thus, therefore, on the other hand, next,
then, and so on.
Transitions in news stories are generally done by repeating a word or phrase
or using a synonym for a key word in the preceding paragraph. Think of block
graphs as islands tied together with transition bridges of repeated words
or phrases.
Direct quotes
You should use direct quotes:
· if a source's language is particularly colorful or picturesque
· when it is important for written information -- especially official
information -- to come from an obviously authoritative voice
· to answer the questions ``why, how, who, or what?''
Use a direct quote after a summary statement that needs amplification, verification
or example.
Remember, a direct quote repeats exactly what the interviewee said. If you
don't have a person's exact words, you can paraphrase, but you cannot change
the meaning of a person's words. And when you paraphrase, you must never use
quotation marks.
Putting it all together: News story
By RICHARD A. KNOX
Colleagues of polio vaccine pioneer Jonas Salk said Wednesday that they are
ready to mount large-scale trials of his AIDS vaccine in thousands of people
infected with the AIDS virus. The Salk group, which had been criticized for
promoting the vaccine without sufficient documentation, this week published
the first scientific report of its results. The group's research showed that
growth of the human immuno-deficiency virus slowed substantially in infected
volunteers given three injections of the vaccine.
The report, in the Journal of Infectious Diseases, comes at a time when researchers
are discouraged about efforts to make an effective AIDS vaccine -- either to
treat HIV-infected people, such as Salk's subjects, or to prevent infection,
such as classic vaccines against polio or smallpox.
``Both approaches have their problems with this virus,'' said Dr. Thomas Merigan
of Stanford University, a prominent AIDS researcher. The virus' ability to elude
immune defenses ``is the most powerful tool this virus is using against us now.''
Putting it all together: Feature story
By JANE MEREDITH ADAMS
They met through video dating, when the sight of his muscular build drove her
so wild she smacked kisses all over the monitor. Never mind his rowdy past,
his other mates, his penchant for projectile vomiting when annoyed. True love
forgives.
Now the young couple would like to start a family -- part animal urge, part
science project. For she is Koko, the world-famous gorilla. A two-time National
Geographic cover model, she wowed the public in the 1970s by learning to communicate
with humans using American Sign Language. Researchers have higher than usual
expectations for the mating of Koko and her muscular intended, Ndume, from the
Brookfield Zoo outside Chicago.
Eager to understand animal intelligence, scientists are hoping to discover whether
Koko will teach her offspring to use sign language.
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